Article Critique
I visited the Li Qun (Basketball)[1] page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on:informal language, information update, and information missing. First of all,I found that the page about Li Qun(Basketball)[2] in the last sentence it said "He became head coach of the Shenzhen Leopards[3]."[4] does not mention when he become,or any source that can prove it. Is he still the coach of Shenzhen Leopards[5] or not? We do not know that. Second,the information does not keep up to date. In the page of Li Qun(Basketball)[6] it said that he is the head coach of the Shenzhen Leopards[7]. However, he already fired by the Shenzhen Leopards[8] in 2017. Now Li Qun(Basketball)[9] is the principal of the Dongguan basketball school, and stil he will keep supervision the first team of the ShenZhen Leopards. If the information is not keep up to date that will make people have a wrong information about Li Qun(Basketball)[10] and tink he is still in Shenzhen Leopards[11]. At last, I found that the page of Li Qun(Basketball)[12] does not have any picture of Li Qun(Basketball)[13], or any other information about his performance during his career time, that should be called information missing. Also the page of Li Qun(Basketball)[14] does not have any personal profile about Li Qun(Basketball)[15]. For example, it does not include how height of Li Qun(Basketball[16]), what position that he play when he play for the CBA team, or any other information. These should be the basic data of a basketball player and they should be in the page of Li Qun(Basketball)[17]. I visited other basketball page, such as Wang Zhi Zhi[18]. His page have all the information during his career time, like early life, CBA career, and Career statistics. These information is very important for a sport player. These data can let us know what kind of player that he is.
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- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Shenzhen Leopards". Wikipedia. 2017-03-05.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Shenzhen Leopards". Wikipedia. 2017-03-05.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Shenzhen Leopards". Wikipedia. 2017-03-05.
- ^ "Shenzhen Leopards". Wikipedia. 2017-03-05.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Shenzhen Leopards". Wikipedia. 2017-03-05.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Li Qun (basketball)". Wikipedia. 2016-05-23.
- ^ "Wang Zhizhi". Wikipedia. 2017-04-10.