User:Jameststurner/Erased de Kooning Drawing/Yayun Zheng Peer Review

General info

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Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Jameststurner

Link to draft you're reviewing
User:Jameststurner/Erased de Kooning Drawing
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Erased de Kooning Drawing

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Greetings,

Lead

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This paragraph clearly introduces the origin of this artwork, but there are still materials that need to be supplemented. You can try to find out the materials to supplement.

Content

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Your article looks more like a story, for example:"Rauschenberg was decided to approach William De Kooning and asked him for a drawing which he could erasePrepared for De Kooning to refuse the request, which would have made the work a performance piece."This is my idea "Rauschenberg asked William De Kooning for an erasable painting asa performance piece on the premise that itMight be rejected. "What do you think?

Sources

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First, there is a lack of links in your article, and you need to mark the source next to the article. They are necessary and important.

A few additional articles include in your edit, annotate them as well.


Yayun Zheng (talk) 02:01, 16 July 2021 (UTC)