The introduction section of this article could use some major tightening up, as the wording is funny and there is lot of extraneous information that doesn’t need to be included in an introduction. Also, each paragraph tends to change topics in the middle and talks about many completely unrelated aspects, instead of separating into multiple paragraphs.
Also, some of the title segments should be changed. For instance, “Discovery” could be something more broad, like “History”, so the section isn’t limited to just just the discovery of the lysosome, and can talk instead about all history concerning the lysosome for many years. Additionally, the section titled “Formation” should be retitled to something that is more telling of what the section could be about. Also, the section talks about both a lysosome’s formation (origin) and decomposition, but the current title doesn’t currently relay that. Another suggestion concerning the topic of titles is that some sub-titles could possibly be added, to better separate the information, and make specific information easier to find.
Finally, after checking five or six different sources, they seem for the most part to be relevant and up to date, but many of them still have a significant amount of useful information to add to the article to make it stronger.
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