Manvita12345

Hello Manvita! This is Priscilla Molina and these are some of my thoughts on your article additions/overall article.

Introduction:

The first sentence left me a little confused as to the connection to the article (especially in reference to the title) so I would try and reword so that sieve tube element would really be the first thing the reader would read and then expand to its connection to phloem.

I feel you can start off by first talking about sieve tube elements in general (as you do at the end of the intro) and then move on to talk about the general characteristics of cells.

Sieve tubes:

I feel you can start with the following sentence as your topic sentence because it helps with the flow of your article, instead of having it a few sentences in : " As stated earlier, there are two categories of sieve elements and these are sieve cells and sieve tube members/elements"

In the last few paragraphs you did a great job of breaking things down to where it was understandable for a high school student. I was able to follow along very easily and when I did have a question on what something meant, you either had a reference or explained it in the following sentence.

Sieve cells:

Your first sentence is a good transition into the next section.

I'm not sure if it's something I should know but if applicable, I would suggest expanding on albuminous cells when you first introduce them in order to facilitate the understanding of when you mention them again later. It just wasn't clear to me immediately how much of importance they were and since later you mentioned they do have an important role, I would suggest expanding on what they are.

I would try and find a smoother transition/connection between your second and third paragraph in this section because it is a little abrupt (I do see the importance of it but the flow is a little awkward).

Discovery:

Overall concise. I further understand your reasoning for focusing on bringing up sieve elements along with phloem.

Further Application:

The sentence that starts as... "It is important..." sounds a little bias. I think instead you can just point out the connection.

Overall I feel like your article was formatted well and the flow was good (except for the parts I mentioned above). Some additional information I would add as well is possibly some pictures/diagrams to get an even better idea to follow each form of sieve element.

Hi Manvita12345,

I think you have a great start on your article. Overall some of my suggestions would be to briefly explain plant terms like phloem and plasmodesmata readers have a better context of what you're talking about. I would also recommend going through your article and correcting grammar errors. One trend I noticed is that the article tends to be written in the passive voice. For a clearer read, you might want to consider using more of an active voice. I also have attached suggestions below for each section of your article. Please let me know if you need anything clarified and good luck!

-Naironfire

Introduction:

In your first sentence you might want to add that phloem is a tissue in plant cells so they know right away we're talking about plants.

You also might want to consider starting your article by talking about seive elements instead of phloem

Also explain in your first sentence that sieve elements are conducting cells and define what conducting cells are

-I would restructure this section to first talk about what sieve elements are, where they're located, and what they do for plants

Sieve tubes:

-Would recommend removing "as stated earlier" because it seems to imply that your reader should already know this and doesn't sound neutral

-can you link "companion cells" to a relevant wikipedia article?

-There are some minor grammar errors that need to be fixed here. Would not recommend using "this" Can you be more specific?

-Can you clarify whether companion cells provide ATP or provide proteins needed to make ATP

-Can you provide a brief definition of plasmodesmata

Sieve Cells:

-Can you clarify what parenchyma are?

-Can you clarify why Callose levels are mesearured to observe Sieve cells and Sieve tube activity?

-Further Applications:

This section seems to talk more about Phloem than about sieve elements. This section could potentially be rewritten to focus more on sieve elements and their applications