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Hi! I am Naven Parthasarathy, a second-year student at Rice University majoring in sociology with a minor in poverty, justice and human capabilities. As an editor am interested in contributing to social justice topics including anti-racism, social work, and public/mental health. Please feel to reach out to me on my talk page or reach me at [email protected] if you have any questions! Thank you for visiting.
I am apart of the following wiki projects: Wikipedia:WikiProject LGBT studies & Wikipedia:WikiProject Asian Americans
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Potential Article to Revise for PJHC 394 in Fall of 2022
Kerala Model
I think that the WIkipedia article on the Kerala Model has great potential to be updated considering the relevance of the model and its applicability to our class. Though the article covers a good portion of the model, there are many errors in the writing that create confusion for the reader. The WikiProject India article is rated as C-Class and of low importance, meriting its further consideration. There is also much discussion on the article’s talk page on changes that could be made, so I believe it would be relevant to make those edits. Moreover, some sections such as “State Policy,” “Hunger,” and “Opinions” consist of only a couple of sentences and could be improved. Overall, considering the current import of the subject and its wide applicability to understanding how to potentially improve development, I think it is an article worth editing
Article Revised for PJHC 371 in Fall of 2021
Kiyoshi Kuromiya
- Kiyoshi Kuromiya, born in a Japanese internment camp, was a civil rights, anti-war, and HIV/AIDS activist. Kuromiya assisted Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. and served as a delegate to the Black Panther Convention that endorsed the gay liberation struggle. I am interested in learning, and expanding Kuromiya's existing Wikipedia article to reflect more of his civil rights activism for Black people as well as how that struggle overlapped with his involvement in the AIDS movement. I’d like to add more about Critical Path, Kuromiya’s HIV resource newsletter, and some of the organizations he was involved with, such as We The People Living with HIV/AIDS and ACT UP Philadelphia.
Rationale for Revision:
-Lack of Information: Much of the vital information on Kiyoshi Kuromiya—his life and his contributions—are missing from the existing article, which is currently rated as a start class article. The article mentions some of Kuromiya’s involvement in different organizations and some of his achievements throughout his life, but fails to expand on the impact of much of his activism. The article fails to dive more into Kuromiya’s specific work during the different periods of his life; rather it mentions anecdotal evidence of his work that does not convey the breadth of his contributions. Moreover, the information presented has not been updated in years and ignores other literature that may provide more insight on Kuromiya’s life. Not to mention that the article is also not very well-cited, with many non-scholarly sources dominating the references section, and would benefit from in-depth research on facts about Kuromiya’s life.
-Notability: The lack of development of this article is especially concerning considering how relevant the intersectional work of Kuromiya is in today’s society. Kuromiya’s work with Black activists such as Martin Luther King Jr. and Philadelphia Black Panther Party members is very relevant in light of recent allyship between Asian American and Pacific Islander (AAPI) and Black activists, such as collaboration and mutual endorsement between the Stop Asian Hate and Black Lives Matter Movement. Furthermore, Kuromiya was at the forefront of advocacy for people living with HIV/AIDS, a struggle that continues to exist today. For people with AIDS (PWA), the difficulties experienced are much harder for racial minorities, with activism often leaving out those who exist on the margins.
-Unclear/misleading Organizational Structure & Headings: The article currently has four main sections: “Family,” “Activist Career,” “Illness, death and interment,” and “Brief Timeline.” The section on Kuromiya’s activism is very broad, covering various experiences without a clear structure to the descriptions. The other sections are underdeveloped with only a few sentences comprising the entirety of the rest of the article. The lead section can also be revised to cut down on redundancy and expanded to encompass more information relevant to Kuromiya’s importance as an activist.Navenp (talk) 20:33, 30 September 2021 (UTC)
I have also created a user page with a draft/outline for my planned changes which you can find here: User:Navenp/Kiyoshi Kuromiya
References:
- Fuller, R. Buckminster., Kuromiya, Kiyoshi. Critical path. Italy: St. Martin's Publishing Group, 1981.
- Fuller, R. Buckminster. Grunch of Giants. United States: St. Martin's Press, 1983.
- Kuromiya, Kiyoshi., Fuller, Richard Buckminster. Cosmography: a posthumous scenario for the future of humanity. New York: Macmillan, 1992.
- Cunningham, William E., Ronald M. Andersen, Mitchell H. Katz, Michael D. Stein, Barbara J. Turner, Steve Crystal, Sally Zierler, et al. “The Impact of Competing Subsistence Needs and Barriers on Access to Medical Care for Persons with Human Immunodeficiency Virus Receiving Care in the United States.” Medical Care 37, no. 12 (1999): 1270–81. http://www.jstor.org/stable/3766943.
- Wm. Christopher Mathews, J. Allen McCutchan, Steven Asch, Barbara J. Turner, Allen L. Gifford, Kiyoshi Kuromiya, Julie Brown, Martin F. Shapiro, and Samuel A. Bozzette. “National Estimates of HIV-Related Symptom Prevalence from the HIV Cost and Services Utilization Study.” Medical Care 38, no. 7 (2000): 750–62. http://www.jstor.org/stable/3767486.
- Dan Royles. “Taking It to the Streets: AIDS, Race, and Protest in Philadelphia.” Pennsylvania Legacies 16, no. 1 (2016): 26–31. https://doi.org/10.5215/pennlega.16.1.0026.
- Lubin, Joan, and Jeanne Vaccaro. 2020. “AIDS Infrastructures, Queer Networks: Architecting the Critical Path”. First Monday 25 (10). https://doi.org/10.5210/fm.v25i10.10403.
- McKinney, Cait. "SEVEN. CRISIS INFRASTRUCTURES: AIDS ACTIVISM MEETS INTERNET REGULATION: " In AIDS and the Distribution of Crises edited by Jih-Fei Cheng, Alexandra Juhasz and Nishant Shahani, 162-182. New York, USA: Duke University Press, 2020. https://doi.org/10.1515/9781478009269-011
- McKinney, Cait. 2018. “Printing the Network: AIDS Activism and Online Access in the 1980s.” Continuum 32 (1): 7–17. https://doi.org/10.1080/10304312.2018.1404670.
- Emmer, Pascal. 2012. “Talkin’ ’Bout Meta-Generation: ACT UP History and Queer Futurity.” Quarterly Journal of Speech 98 (1): 89–96. https://doi.org/10.1080/00335630.2011.638664.
- Bassi, Harpreet. 2017. "An Exploration of the Application of Crowdsourcing to Health-Related Research.” Electronic Thesis and Dissertation Repository. https://ir.lib.uwo.ca/etd/5033
- Robinson, G. (2016). The great unknown : Japanese American sketches / Greg Robinson. University Press of Colorado.