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Good Articles vs. Needs Improvement

Crème brûlée

• Spelling of name is debated
• Lead could be expanded
• Order of topics is sufficient but could be tweaked
• Crema Catalan heading could be made into a subheading
• Necessity of ingredients list is questionable
• Could benefit from some copyediting

Xenophobia

• Strong focus on Jews
• Could benefit from a broader explanation
• Strong focus on discrimination
• Addition of concern towards maintaining culture could be added
• Could benefit from some copyediting

Choosing Articles to Work on

The following articles are my choices for possible projects.

• Frogger
• List of races and species in The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
• Apple pie

Begin working!

Forestry law

Write up the problem:

• Lead is not clear

• Does not adequately summarize contents

• Improper tone

• Written like an opinion essay
• Neutral point of view issues

• Lack of citations
• Structure

• Long paragraphs
• Headings are not clear
• No images
• See also section is lacking

• Context is not provided

• Jargon and technical wording

List your tasks:

• Ensure lead summarizes all of the content

• Remember to include changes on Environmental law

• Rewrite for tone

• Use formal language
• Correct to a neutral point of view

• Mark instances that need citations
• Improve structure

• Shorten/break up paragraphs
• Rename and organize headings
• Group together similar content
• Avoid redundancy across sections
• Include images
• Add articles to the See also section

• Provide context for the subject

• Use clear, precise, and accurate terms

• Ensure past Talk posts have been taken into consideration
• General copyediting

Frogger

Write up the problem:

• Lead is not clear

• Does not adequately summarize contents
• Uses technical wording

• Lack of citations
• Structure

• Organization is strange
• Headings are not clear

• Context is not provided

• Jargon and technical wording

List your tasks:

• Clarify lead

• Summarize all of the content
• Simplify and explain technical language

• Mark instances that need citations
• Improve structure

• Utilize structure from featured video game articles
• Rename and organize headings
• Group together similar content
• Avoid redundancy across sections

• Provide context

• Use clear, precise, and accurate terms

• Ensure past Talk posts have been taken into consideration
• General copyediting