Step 4 : Critique notes
- -definition is eh--doesnt really explain the concept super well
- - source 2 cant find
- Does last sentence of first para even need to be there?
- 2nd paragraph makes claims with no sources.
- “Community gardening in most communities are open to the public and provide space for citizens to cultivate plants for food or recreation” awk phrasing.
- “A community gardening program that is well-established is Seattle's P-Patch.” changing to a well dev community gardening program makes it less passive
- 4 source cant get to
- First para of history lacks flow and kind of doesn't show as well as it could how it related to getting to urban farming
- Not a citation where says citation needed
- 8 and 9 source links don't work.
- Last para of history is fully an opinion and should probably be cut out, it would be used in perspectives as some people think that with a source, but it doesn’t work there because it is opinion and not history.
- Resource and economic and environmental perspectives have way too long of quotes that could be easily explained in ones own word and probably violates wikis plagarim rules.
- 11 source cant find article
- Block quotes vs non block quotes, what applies? (in food security)
- Why not quote marks in block quote?
- Weird quote in 2nd half food security
- Why sprouting jar in impact area
- Upa vs ua, need consistency--whats the difference
- 17 doesn't work
- 24 doesn't work
- Coherency of social impacts, last paragraph seems really out of place
- 26 link doesn't work
- 30 link doesn't work
- Reduction in ozone and particulate matter--could be written better, just general edits of making language sound better.
- Why need to separate energy efficiency from others below. Could all just be under environment
- Noise pollution section isn;t that well written either
- 43 wrong hyperlink
- Economy of scale could be incorporated elsewhere and the title makes no sense
- 50 link doesn't work
- Some of environmental justice doesn't seem like it really fits
- Last 2 paragraphs of implementation have no sources even though they make claims.
- Benefits and trade offs should be before all the examples especially since the examples take up more space
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