Purpletiger123

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About Me

Hi! I'm a college student who is studying in the business/finance field. Some of my hobbies include reading, listening to music, and drawing. Reading helps you to become more tolerable to uncertainty My favorite colors are black, grey, and light blue. One place that I would like to visit is Thailand because of their delicious exotic fruits! My favorite snack to eat is Hot Cheetos because they are tasty and spicy!

My Wikipedia Interests

If I'm active on Wikipedia later in the future, I'll probably cover more topics that I am interested in and are relevant in that time. Most likely by then many events have occurred and this page will be a way to look back in time and see how the world has changed.

Article Evaluation

Nature is beautiful, yet unpredictable. Just like lightning, it strikes at anything and doesn’t stop. Although it isn’t necessarily important to understand lightning to its absolute core, lightning can kill. Something that can kill us is worth knowing. One of the beautiful aspects of lightning is its quick flash. Light produced by heat is termed “incandescent” I visited the incandescence article on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: its irrelevant sentences, lack of articles, and several grammar errors that may hinder us from fully grasping the essence of incandescence and altogether the potential of how great this Wikipedia article.

This Wikipedia article on incandescent has very little information on the topic, therefore there are a few irrelevant sentences to critique. Under its “Observation and use” subheading, the sentence “if the filament could be made hotter, efficiency would increase; however, there are currently no materials able to withstand such temperature which would be appropriate for use in lamps” seems to lose its informative voice once the writer of this page self-input their own voice, mildly complaining about the uselessness of incandescent light bulbs. The paragraph begins to inform about the temperatures at which substances reach in order for incandescent to be visible. The color, the visible spectrum, and light source were explained, however, the detail about “if the filament could be made hotter, efficiency would increase” could be replaced altogether with a few sentences about the alternatives to other powerful light sources, which they later mentioned. In other words, that sentence is unnecessary to add and ruins the flow of the paragraph.

There’s not a lot to say about incandescence, however, articles about where incandescent is seen in nature and other real-life examples where light is present should be mentioned, which could make this Wikipedia page well-rounded and informative, not just about lightbulbs. Where light is produced by heat, such as the sun, red burners on the stove, and other sources could be added. Because incandescent light is inefficient in terms of energy usage, producing more heat than light, it would be helpful to include information where incandescent light sources can pose dangers to the environment. This article mentions about the temperature at which substances start to glow and its visibility, the color as the temperature rises, and minor details about its inefficiency. This article could be exceptional if information about other real-life light sources and its impact on the environment were included.

There are a few grammatical errors embedded within this article page, and we can begin by looking in the first paragraph under “Observation and use”: “In practice, virtually all solid or liquid substances start to glow around 798 K (525 C, 977 F), with a mildly dull red color...” This sentence uses a comma when it isn’t necessary. If the sentence was “In practice, virtually all solid or liquid substances start to glow around 798 K (525 C, 977 F) with a mildly dull red color…” it would be correct. Although there aren't major errors in grammar within this page, it is important to make sure they are corrected, so that it is professional and sophisticated.

Although there are several errors within this Wikipedia page, the information was delivered. To make it better, the writer should perhaps add more details, remove unnecessary sentences, and correct the grammar of several sentences.