User:Rollinginhisgrave/sandbox

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  • Starting off, you should just make the introduction part of the lede. MOS:LEADLENGTH states Few well-written leads will be shorter than about 100 words and the introduction would serve this purpose well. You can then cut out the second sentence Aulenti was one of the prominent female architects in post-war Italy.
  • modern movement is there a reason you call it modern movement instead of modernism?
  • I'll have a look at the lede again after you merge the introduction and avoid doubling up information.
  • She was named "Gaetana Emilia" This was her surname? Or her middle name?
  • Aldo Aulenti comma after this
  • The sentences are quite stubby, and would be made more readable by adding conjunctions. An example of two sentences that could be joined is Her father, Aldo Aulenti was an accountant. Her mother was a school teacher.