User:Sozzystar/Alix Page/Hannahgerny Peer Review

General info

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Sozzystar

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Alix Page

Evaluate the drafted changes

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Overall

  • The article looks great!! I think that you've added a lot to improve the article and the content you've included is relevant. I think there are a few areas you could add more information to (like the lead and career section), but overall you've added a lot of the available information about her. My only other suggestion is that you get rid of the history section and put that information into the other sections, which I think would make your article better organized. Overall, good job:))

Lead

  • I think the lead could be updated to reflect new content/ a very brief description of the new sections
    • Obviously you can't include too much detail here, but another sentence could be good
      • ex: Page began song writing in high school and has since released 2 EPs and opened for multiple tours, including Gracie Abrams

Content

  • The content added is relevant and up-to-date
  • The only gaps I see that could have added information
    • career section:
      • add the year her singles stripes and frank were released in
      • no mention of her debut EP old news, add a sentence about this and more details if available (like who produced it)
      • saw from source 13 that she recorded the song radiohead in one take, this could be a relevant detail to add
    • early life section:
      • add information about her high school/ start as a songwriter to give more background about her early life (I read on source 1 she went to an arts high school and read on source 2 the husband of her high school music director produced her album)
      • it looks like alix was in college while she released her EP/ went on tour, could be interesting to add to this section

Tone and balance

  • content is all neutral and appears unbiased

Sources and references

  • The content accurately reflects what the cited sources say and the sources are current/ best available and they all work
  • A little harder to find sources for a lesser known artist, so I think you've done a good job incorporating a variety of sources to build up this page

Organization

  • The content is well written and easy to read
  • I like that you organize the career section by year, it makes it easier to follow
  • You could incorporate the information from the history section into the early life and career section which might make the article more cohesive
    • Everything about high school could go in the early life section and the information about her debut EP, Goose, and her representation could go in the career section

Images and media

  • I think the images do a lot to add to the page and they are well-captioned