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Needs Improvement Articles
editHammer Article
- Lead description gives extraneous details
- Sections need expansion
- Lists throughout the text are lengthy and only some sections have a description
- An image section at the end highlights only a few types of hammers which makes it seem like the earlier lists could be reduced
- It would make more sense for the flow of the article to have the types of hammers sections and images near each other since they contain related information
Popular Culture Article
- Strays from Wikipedia's neutral point of view value
- May contain original research
- Information in the "History and Definitions" section seems choppy because of so many short paragraphs. It may help to separate this into a history section and a definitions section instead of keeping them combined
- Sections at the end need expansion and clarity as to why they are involved in popular culture
Choosing Articles to Work on
editAssigned Articles for Improvement
editProblems
- Very Lengthy
- Extensive quotes
- Switches between supporters' and detractors' arguments without a concise statement of their main points
Tasks
- Establish the purpose of the article
- Some of the article is dedicated to the controversy while some is more focused on corset wearing culture
- Decipher the main points for each section
- This is contained in the quotes and not concisely stated
- Establish the most effective layout for the readers’ understanding of the information
- Determine the best way to reduce the length of the article by reducing quoted material
- Determine if the quote is essential to the article
- Determine which section of quotes should remain direct quotes and which sections can be eliminated or paraphrased
- Determine which quotes as a whole can be summarized
Problems
- Additional citations needed (tagged)
- Not reflective of an encyclopedic tone (tagged)
- Organization of ideas within main sections
Tasks
- Sort through the ideas presented in each section of the text
- Reorganize those ideas so that they are more user friendly
- Adjust tone when needed
- Verify talk page and sources (talk page has highlighted areas of the content which contradict information in the article)
- Verify that the article is self-contained and does not rely on links