I'm an eager student of Everett Community College and fine artist who delves primarily in production of sculpture, ceramics, and American traditional style paintings. I have dabbled in printmaking and writing poetry. Often, I will use makeup as an art form, producing theatrical makeup looks from my own imagination. I often participate in spelunking with a group of peers and am interested in the nature of the Pacific Northwest. Sketching natural scenes and elements of nature is a pastime of mine. I have heritage linked to the Snoqualmie Native American tribe and have several family members who are part of the tribe. I'm extremely interested in native culture and history as well as the contemporary issues surrounding Native Americans.
Article Critique
editI visited the Old school (tattoo) page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: The citations included are outdated by at least 4 years, some of cited information is not connected to a reputable source, and significant artist contributions to the art style is missing.[1]
Outdated Citations
editWhile exploring the Old school (tattoo) page, I found that the citation which referenced the most recent source was written in 2013.[2] The other sources were both written in 2009[3][4], making them 8 years old. Tattoo styles to me are a fluid and ever-changing subject, meaning the styles themselves can vastly change and grow within that time frame. I think this page would benefit from more recent sources to support facts stated.
Reliability of Cited Sources
editFrom clicking the links and exploring the citations present on the page, I found that one source was from a blog[5], and another was from a website specifically devoted to Americana icons.[6] Neither of these are reliable sources, especially since I could not find the authors qualifications on either site. Having reputable sources would be a fantastic way to improve this article and expand knowledge on it.
Significant Artist Contributions
editSince an art style is heavily reliant on the popular artists of the time, I find it important to include contributions that each popular artist made. The page has an "Artists" subsection, but I would like to see an expansion on the artists themselves and how they affected the growth of the style. I suggest a small subsection for each artist mentioned, including a brief background and their contributions to Old school tattoo style.
Summary
editWhile this page is a great start, there is so much more to the Old school art style than appears on the page. With inclusion of updated, reliable citations and expanded information of artist contributions, I believe this page could be more well-rounded and complete article.
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- ^ "Old school (tattoo)". Wikipedia. 2017-01-19.
- ^ "A Short, Incomplete History of American Traditional Tattooing | New-York Historical Society". New-York Historical Society. 2013-02-06. Retrieved 2017-01-27.
- ^ JP (2009-01-29). "THE LEGEND OF SAILOR JERRY | TATTOO MASTER NORMAN COLLINS". The Selvedge Yard. Retrieved 2017-01-27.
- ^ Clerk, Carol (2009). Vintage Tattoos- The Book of Old-School Skin Art. Universe. pp. 12–15.
- ^ "A Short, Incomplete History of American Traditional Tattooing | New-York Historical Society". New-York Historical Society. 2013-02-06. Retrieved 2017-01-27.
- ^ JP (2009-01-29). "THE LEGEND OF SAILOR JERRY | TATTOO MASTER NORMAN COLLINS". The Selvedge Yard. Retrieved 2017-01-27.