User:Wsmith5335/Ord's thyroiditis/Purplesquire Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
edit- Whose work are you reviewing?
Wsmith5335
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Wsmith5335/Ord's thyroiditis
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Ord's thyroiditis
Evaluate the drafted changes
editLead
The current lead is a good overview, with the first sentance agreat overview. However "It is more common among women than men." feels a little out of place, if it were to be combined with another sentence it might flow better. Also, all the information in the lead is not present in the rest of the article, so if the rest of the article were expanded to contain that information the lead would be more of a summary.
Content
The content added is really relevant and up to date. Some content that could be added would be: an expanded diagnosis section (and make it more readable), find sources for all the other sections in the article.
Tone
The tone felt very neutral and professional.
Sources
The added information doesn't feel like it quite aligns with the source, as the source lists those symptoms to hypothyroidism in general, and not specifically to Ord's thyroiditis. If you could also find a source that states that Ord's thyroiditis or a source that focuses more on Ord's thyroiditis, that would be great.
Organization
Overall, the sections are organized really well. The diagnosis section could be written more clearly, maybe with a description of what TSH and fT4 are, or at least a link to a different Wikipedia article.
Overall
Overall, this is a good addition to the article, it expands upon the information previously there, as well as putting a source to it.