User talk:16912 Rhiannon/Steve Huffman
Latest comment: 6 years ago by 16912 Rhiannon in topic Some suggestions
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Some suggestions
editFirst off, I want to say that your proposal is very professional and it would be a dream if all COI editors could work at such a competent level; great job. I hope you don't mind me providing some feedback on the draft as a whole here in advance.
- I feel the lead should mention his reddit username (spez) as it's a redirect target and probably how a lot of redditors would look him up; perhaps next to his birthdate in the parenthesis?
- Considering linking "top 10 websites in the world" to List of most popular websites
- "SMS text messaging" seems redundant, as they're both texting
- "had grown large" -> "had grown so large"?
- "a subreddit popular with supporters of Donald Trump" - maybe link The_Donald after a comma since it does have its own article (personally I feel including this part is undue weight, but we can discuss the section when we get to it)
Overall the tone of the article is very well-balanced. Great work so far. Opencooper (talk) 00:17, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks so much for these notes, Opencooper. I've made the edits as suggested. One thing to mention: because the draft is in userspace, it's reading the wikilink for /r/The Donald as being a link to a subpage of my user space, but it obviously wouldn't do that in the live article! I'll be following up soon on the article Talk with my next proposal. Cheers, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 18:02, 19 September 2018 (UTC)