User talk:Aaronshneider/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Herstory1

Hi Aaron,

Your writing style is very sophisticated and your organization of the article is very put together. I wonder if you could change the word unrecoverable to irretrievable? Also the heading Lit. in Roman Rep and Empire to "in Ancient Rome?" Just might sound better/more straightforward. Also are there any other more modern sources that analyze literature surrounding slavery? That way you could site more than the actual documents you are discussing. The second sentence you have is unclear. Instead you could say "Certain primary sources help to examine these differences btw Greek and Roman slavery attitudes?" or something like that so that it's not too longwinded/confusing. Other than that, it looks like you are in very good shape.

Herstory1 (talk) 04:09, 21 April 2017 (UTC)Herstory1Reply