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Enhance Bio section and add photos
editBiography section: In many ways, this biography section feels rushed to me. If we step back and look at the sheer magnitude of contributions Gertrude B. Elion has made to science and medicine, it becomes apparent that more research and detail about her life could add a ton to this page. The bare bones are good but there is so much room for elaboration. At one point, they mention that Elion is unable to obtain a graduate professor position but worked as a high school teacher. I think this is an area that bares more explanation. Are there reasons for this? Furthermore, there is also a rough time line about the schools she attended and the places she worked; however, when it comes to her personal life, there really is not much to go off of. We know very little about any relationships she had and even less about her hobbies. There are many sources that say she was pretty much married to her work so perhaps this is why she was never married. There is also more information available about her hobbies that are not mentioned here. I think using more of this information would make a bit more of an impact than the one sentence currently in place. The more personal information offered about Elion, the more relatable she will be.
For instance:
“Elion admitted that her work was her life, but she also enjoyed photography and travel, both products of her curiosity about life. She also enjoyed opera, ballet and theater. Though she never married, she enjoyed being the "favorite aunt" to her brother's children.”
http://www.biography.com/people/gertrude-b-elion-9285981#career-as-a-chemist
Here is a powerful quote by Elion that could work to strengthen the impact of this page as well: “Don’t be afraid of hard work. Nothing worthwhile comes easily. Don’t let others discourage you or tell you that you can’t do it. In my day I was told women didn’t go into chemistry. I saw no reason why we couldn’t.” – Gertrude B. Elion
Pictures: I would also suggest adding more photos than the one that is currently on the page. I like the one that is up because she is in a lab coat in what looks to be a lab setting, but this does look like it was taken towards the end of her career. I would request that first of all more photos be posted of her, but also that these photos would include some of her in her younger days working in labs and classrooms. This could add a lot in the way of credibility to her page.