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The article, "Fainting Goats" stood out as a good contender for this assignment as it is severely lacking in sources and additional information on the condition. Although there is not an abundance of peer reviewed material on the subject, there is definitely enough to further elaborate.

The article describes Myotonia Congenita as a condition in which the goats "freeze" for approximately 3 seconds, when in reality it is considered to be a seizing of the muscles that can last between 5 and 20 seconds.

There are only 10 provided sources in the reference section, most of which seem to be concentrated on the condition itself, not specifically geared towards the myotonic goats.

I intend to provide a stronger information base on what causes the condition itself on a molecular level, as the article succeeded in getting the basic point across but failed to go into specifics. I also plan to expand on the various factors that affect the severity of the condition, like temperature and nutrition. It was also not mentioned in the article how this condition affects the goats health wise, for example, life span, muscle distribution, other linked conditions...etc.

Abm213 (talk) 18:48, 17 October 2017 (UTC)

This seems like a good start! Your bibliography is good, perhaps consider adding a few more sources to back the information you plan to add on congenital myotonia. I agree that the section on congenital myotonia is lacking in specifics, especially on the molecular level. Yellow Martin (talk) 00:43, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

Bibliography

1) Martin, A. F., Bryant, S. H., & Mandel, F. (1984). Isomyosin distribution in skeletal muscles of normal and myotonic goats. Muscle & Nerve, 7(2), 152-160. doi:10.1002/mus.880070212

2) Lipicky, R. J., & Bryant, S. H. (1972). Temperature effects on cable parameters and K efflux in normal and myotonic goats. American Journal of Physiology, 222(1), 213-215. doi:10.220.33.1

3) Hegyeli, A., & Szent-Gyorgyi, A. (1961). Water and Myotonia in Goats. Science, 133(3457), 1011-1011. doi:10.1126/science.133.3457.1011

4) Bryant, S. H. (1979). Myotonia In The Goat. University of Cincinnati College of Medicine, 314-325

5) Monteagudo, L. V., Tejedor, M. T., Ramos, J. J., Lacasta, D., & Ferrer, L. M. (2015). Ovine congenital myotonia associated with a mutation in the muscle chloride channel gene. The Veterinary Journal, 204(1), 128-129. doi:10.1016/j.tvjl.2015.01.014

Abm213 (talk) 19:12, 17 October 2017 (UTC)

Article Evaluation

I think your plan looks good! Something I would try to look into is locating sources for the introductory paragraph, as none of the evidence looks to be cited. The article itself looks relatively unbiased, as does your outline. When you discuss the various factors that may affect the severity of myotonia congenita, you might want to talk about more than two features (if there are more than two). Is there also a different in the condition's appearance across species of goats? That might be something interesting to look into to expand the article further. Acrabtree38 (talk) 22:19, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review Response

Thanks for your feedback! I plan to expand my sources for this article, as well as find some for the existing introductory paragraph. I think expanding on the condition on a molecular level as well as showing possible differences between the conditions in different species are great ideas!

Abm213 (talk) 20:59, 30 October 2017 (UTC)