User talk:Addesimone/sandbox

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Sweiner02

Great job on adding all of that information! The disease itself has a lot of linked medical conditions and associated jargon. Maybe link those conditions and super big words to other wiki articles to assist reader. I.e. Link the article to "ptosis" so that others can understand exactly what that means. Also, citations are missing. Otherwise the article was really well done and you included a ton more useful information! Asanto22 (talk) 03:31, 16 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

  • The general draft is looking good. There's a lot of good information here and the structure is well organized.
  • Needs a LOT more links to other wikipedia pages.
  • Obviously needs something in the pathophysiology section. It actually looks like there's a reasonable amount on this.
  • Prognosis is a little vague.
  • Missing recent research. Must have this.
  • All sections must have sources cited.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 18:06, 30 November 2019 (UTC)Reply