User talk:Alexstonehill/San Juan Island National Historical Park

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Alexstonehill in topic Peer Review

Hi Alex! I had the pleasure of reviewing your San Juan Island National Parks article. Here are a few of my thoughts:

Content: The article feels pretty complete with the additions of wildlife and recreation but here are a few additional ideas for sections (if they are relevant): - Can the number of visitors be updated? - Any notable research completed on the island - Notable events taken place there - visits from notable people - A couple sites also mentioned Orca sitings (for the wildlife section) - I'm not sure if there's more information on it, but the NPS site said the park is a part of the American Indian and Tribal Liason Program. Also the history could include which tribe(s) the land was originally occupied by. The Bureau of Land Management site also had an interesting comment that may fir into the history about the formation of the island from an ice sheet.

In general, I think the organization of the article makes sense, the tone is balanced, and the references are all notable. My main suggestion would be to go back further into the history (if possible), which would also align with Wikipedia's goal of providing information about historically marginized groups.

I definitely want to visit now!JenPatt87 (talk) 19:25, 23 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Hi Alex, In general I really like the additions you made to the article, but I think it's still pretty focused on the history of the Pig War. To balance this, I think you could expand on current activity in the park. Including numbers like annual visitors, more detail about the hiking trails, whether or not you can camp there, etc. would definitely add to the article. Like Jen said, you could also include some information on the tribal history of the island to increase perspective on the place.

In terms of the copy- I would consider editing some phrases like "Cooler heads prevailed" in the setting and historical context section, or some of the more technical terms to be more readable and understandable. Otherwise I think overall you have a well-balanced, well-resourced article!

-Hannah

Hannahmarriiee (talk) 02:46, 24 April 2021 (UTC)Reply

@Hannahmarriiee and JenPatt87: Thank you both! Those suggestions are super helpful. I felt pretty tentative about altering the existing material (as opposed to adding my own new sections) but you've given me the encouragement I need. And yes, there are some good sources about the native history and archeology that I will incorporate. Appreciate that encouragement too Alexstonehill (talk) 22:25, 26 April 2021 (UTC)Reply