Alliacev
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editHello, I have no idea if this is right? ALAlmond7288 (talk) 01:13, 25 August 2017 (UTC) ALAlmond7288 (talk) 01:13, 25 August 2017 (UTC)
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editHello, Alliacev, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:24, 14 September 2017 (UTC)
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editNice work on your first draft. I think you're headed in the right direction, except in the Roles and responsibilities section. Lists of bullet points are fine when everyone knows what you're talking about, but they're less useful in a case like this when the reader may not know what these things are. Paragraphs are much better. They are easier to read and they give you the opportunity to elaborate an explain things.
The other issue is a minor formatting one - section headers should use sentence capitalization, not title capitalization. Only capitalize the first word (and any proper nouns). Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 13:55, 6 October 2017 (UTC)
Thank you! We'll be sure to correct these things. Alliacev (talk) 22:21, 6 October 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for the peer review, we will definitely use your advice to make some improvementsTLund (talk) 18:23, 27 October 2017 (UTC)
Edits per peer suggestions
editIan and Toni contributed some suggestion to improve our article. I have taken their suggestions into account and edited our article accordingly. The bullet points under "Roles and responsibilities" were removed and changed to paragraph style. I also changed all the headings to sentence capitalization. I also was able to cite the HHNA sentence under the introduction. Alliacev (talk) 19:58, 27 October 2017 (UTC)