Amsanders2
Hi — Preceding unsigned comment added by 208.96.144.77 (talk) 17:19, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
Hi,
Before even reading your article, I skimmed through it and realized that you have a few that you forgot to delete out of the template. (the very first line in the article, under "death" and "context" you still have "no author" and the "external links don't look like they have been touched.)Also, put his name at the top of the photo. I would say just to take these out/edit them to make it look a bit more aesthetically pleasing over all!
In the death section, it may be a good idea to give more information on the group if possible. I would also re-state the name of the radio station. Some of the information seemed kind of slim, but as we did the same project, I understand how difficult it can be to find most of it. I would say just beef it up a bit if possible.
The context part looks good, and I like the examples of other incidents. I would maybe expand more on other ways that media/journalists have been targeted.
Is it possible to expand at all on the impact section? Was anything done as a result of this attack? Your statement needs more backing up.
I would put at least 2 more reaction in the article.
Try to find possibly names and ages for his family.
I was able to find a youtube tribute to my journalist for the external links, maybe try that! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 83.46.11.92 (talk) 14:10, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
Evansville meetup
editYou're invited to help plan and attend Wikimedia's very first Evansville meetup! Bob the WikipediaN (talk • contribs) 02:54, 2 May 2012 (UTC)