Anavimadumim15
Just testing how this works. Sohn.philip (talk) 02:33, 12 January 2015 (UTC)
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editJust wanted to pop by and say hi! BChung2 (talk) 17:51, 23 January 2015 (UTC)
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CHM437 Peer Editing
editHey there, I think you have a great first draft of your wiki page. I like all the references and the thoroughness of your article. Here are some suggestions for improvement:
1. For your introduction, I would start off with "Siderocalin is......" as most wiki pages are like that, and I think a concise definition right from the beginning will have more impact.
2. The headings for your sections could be a little more concise, maybe have major headings like "Activity"/"Structure" etc. and then put more detailed subheadings.
3. There is a lot of technical jargon that the public may not understand. I would try to use more general wording since not everyone may have a strong research background. That being said, I am impressed with the amount of research you put in- good job!
4. Maybe you could add in some diagrams or a picture of your protein (although I'm sure you'll include some later on).
Other then that, good luck with the assignment.
CHM437 Peer Review
editHello Anavimadumim15!
I think that you're very close to finishing, and that you have all the information you need to make an outstanding Wikipedia article on siderocalin.
My major critique would be that the article is actually getting a bit long, and at times reads like an essay rather than an encyclopedia entry. It should be succinct, and the general public should be able to navigate the article quickly to get the information they need.
You don't need to give detailed background information, as you can simply link to this content. For this reason some sections, such as "The Iron Requirements of Host Organisms," might be unnecessary. Feel free to include a "See Also" section, where you can link to Wikipedia topics that you feel are relevant. This can be achieved using the wikicode:
{{see also|page1|page2|page3|...}}
There are also some style issues that you may want to address. For instance, you shouldn't refer redundantly to siderocalin in the title of subsections (eg. Siderocalin as a Mediator of Mammalian Iron Transport, or The Structure of Scn). As BChung2 mentioned, your first sentence should introduce the subject of the article, and the introduction should summarize the most important points.
Also, I've noticed that you've integrated your references into the body text. It might be nice to copy and paste all of these to the bottom of the article in order to reduce clutter. This could be helpful for you, as well as for future editors once the article goes live. You should also try to avoid primary sources, and maybe shift over to book sources if you can. Google Books has been useful for me, and it could probably direct you to textbook sources available online, or else available in the University of Toronto Libraries network.
Best wishes, Czeer (talk) 00:10, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
- Hey Anavimadumim15,
- Just to clarify. The See Also wikicode that I provided would be put underneath a section header so that you could keep that particular section brief. Otherwise you could keep it simple and just make your final subsection a See Also section where you just list topics and link to them ☺
- Czeer (talk) 19:05, 3 March 2015 (UTC)
Your Peer Review
editFound it on my talk page. Also, I read your peer review in your voice.
March 2015
editHello, I'm Carwile2. I noticed that you recently removed some content from User:Anavimadumim15/sandbox without explaining why. In the future, it would be helpful to others if you described your changes to Wikipedia with an accurate edit summary. If this was a mistake, don't worry; I restored the removed content. If you would like to experiment, please use the sandbox. If you think I made a mistake, or if you have any questions, you can leave me a message on my talk page. The reverted edit can be found here. Carwile2 *Shoot me a message* 16:03, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
Small Review
editI noticed that for the dissociation constant, you use KD instead of Kd.
Markup | Renders as |
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K<sub>d</sub> |
Kd |
Marking your sandbox as a sandbox
editHi Anavimadumim15,
I noticed that you received a warning for editing the article in your sandbox. I think that this occurred because you inadvertently removed the wikicode {{student sandbox}} from the top of your sandbox, thereby moving the article to the main space!
Just a heads up.
Best wishes, Czeer (talk) 18:42, 13 March 2015 (UTC)
Feedback
editNice work on your article draft. Just a few minor formatting issues on how you might improve things. Convention in Wikipedia articles is that we don't capitalize section titles (other than the first word and proper nouns). We also generally leave the article title and the word "the" out of section headers; so "Iron requirements of host organisms" rather than "The Iron Requirements of Host Organisms" and "Structure" rather than "The Structure of Siderocalin".
As I said, these are minor issues, but fixing them would improve your article. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:06, 19 March 2015 (UTC)
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