User talk:Andreamays/sandbox
Good Job
editWhen it comes to citations there are multiple of them for one sentence. Choose one for the citation. Name some of the social media platforms that are used to promote. Undo the hyper link on the strongest Families because that page does not exist. Don't hyperlink things more than once adn check the sources to make sure they are indirect. --Hportmann (talk) 15:52, 22 October 2018 (UTC)
peer view by Shannon
editI love your lead section! It is well organized and clear. I understand the basics of your topic even from one paragraph. Well done!
don't hyperlink bell Canada twice
I would go into more detail when explaining the actual day and the events that occur. How does Bell Canada know someone tweeted, texted, or called someone? Maybe find research. Perhaps, talk about their hashtag use on certain social medias.
The impact section is good. Look into their impact globally? Can people who aren't from Canada help? Are other companies being inspired by Bell Canada and want to start a similar thing?
Overall, this is really well done. Double check your grammar mechanics and wording. I would find a little more research about each section to prove credibility! GOOD JOB!!
Edits I constructed
editIn order to develop the Bell Let's Talk article, I added multiple subsections to the article. I added multiple sentences to the lead section to summarize the information that I would be later using in the article. I added an "Events" subsection which includes both "Bell Let's Talk Day" and "Clara's Big Ride". I also included an "Impact" subsection where I discuss different organizations that Bell Canada has partnered with to provide better mental health support. As mentioned by Shannon, I removed unnecessary hyperlinks and added more details for the Bell Let's Talk Day subsection including information on their ambassadors and spokespeople. I also removed non-external sources and sources that were not relevant to the article. --Andreamays (talk) 15:44, 26 October 2018 (UTC)