User talk:Anewens/Diffuse neonatal hemangiomatosis/Alukyo1 Peer Review

Peer Review Questions

Question 1. Do the group’s edits substantially improve the article as described in the Wikipedia peer review “Guiding framework”?

The edits add a lot more content and organization to the article! One of the suggestions would be to group Diagnosis and Differential Diagnosis together to help improve flow of the article; maybe changing the lead title: "Proposed Treatment" to "Future Directional Treatments" or "Other Treatment Possibilities" will help with separating what is already a determined treatment and what is not (but all the information in these sections is so good)! Alukyo1 (talk) 16:51, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

Question 2. Has the group achieved its overall goals for improvement?

I am unable to see the goals that were set for the article, but I believe the group made lots of improvement and still have time to continue making minor changes to their article to make it more organized and clear! Alukyo1 (talk) 16:51, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

Question 3. Does the draft submission reflect a neutral point of view?

The draft submission reflects a neutral point of view. Using words like "most common", "it is believed", "may" indicate that they are referencing what they learned from other sources and not making claims without evidence. Even when referring to case studies, these cases were presented in a very neutral way - thus being more informative than persuasive. Alukyo1 (talk) 16:51, 1 August 2022 (UTC) Alukyo1 (talk) 16:50, 1 August 2022 (UTC)