Anthonna

Hakeleh: See sandbox discussion tab, I wrote back in there. Anthonna (talk) 19:04, 24 October 2011 (UTC)anthonna

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Hi Anthonna, Great article! It was easy to understand, well organized, and very informative. It seems like you are on a really good track, but I thought of a few points you can add in to make it even better if you’d like.

While reading the article myself, I found myself wondering…what about butylparaben do manufacturers find to be so great that it continues to be a very commonly used substance despite its possible negative health effects?

It would be good for you to go a bit more into how exactly butylparaben acts as a preservative and how its antimicrobial effects are produced. Here are some articles I found that may help.

• http://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC92888/

• http://informahealthcare.com/doi/abs/10.1080/07853890701195262

Why does butylparaben continue to be used rather than natural alternatives? Are there natural alternatives? What are the pros and cons of replacing butylparaben with these substances?

• http://www.happi.com/articles/2005/05/preservative-update

You said that butylparaben can decrease sperm production but did not go into that much detail about how androgen activity can be linked to elevated butylparaben levels, How do butylparabens decrease androgens?

What are some of the future areas of research regarding butylparaben?

It would also be good to see a new section on Influence on the World that looks at levels of bioaccumulation, concentrations found in humans, and how exposure to this substance can be avoided.

• http://www.mendeley.com/research/fate-and-partitioning-of-selected-pharmaceuticals-in-aquatic-environment/

• http://www.thegoodhuman.com/2007/06/21/what-are-parabens-and-why-should-you-avoid-them/

Good luck, and I hope this helps! Hortonsb (talk) 06:44, 13 November 2011 (UTC)