Aselevos
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:07, 27 September 2017 (UTC)
Heather's peer review
editLead Section: Seems like a good lead. I am a bit confused on the last sentence in that section: "Compared to Blood Orange's second album, Cupid Deluxe and his third album, Freetown Sound, Coastal Grooves received tentative results." What do you mean by 'results'? Do you mean the reaction of consumers and/or critics? Do you mean sales? Or is this last sentence in reference to the sentence before it (about the professional rating)?
Background: "Dev Hynes, also known as Blood Orange . . ." I believe you don't actually wish to italicize the name Blood Orange here, since it's referring to one of his monikers and not the title of an album/book/etc.? Also be sure to capitalize the 'c' in 'Lightspeed Champion.'
The sentence 'Before Blood Orange and Coastal Grooves . . .' is confusing to me because it makes it seem like 'Blood Orange' is an album name. Perhaps you simply need to say 'Before Coastal Grooves, Blood Orange was recording under different monikers . . .' etc.
"Hynes took a trip down to Los Angeles where he would meet producer with Ariel Rechtshaid to create the album." Minor issue with tenses & typo; probably best to keep it in simple past tense ('where he met with producer Ariel Rechtshaid . . .')
"The album seems to be inspired by transgendered icons such as Octavia St. Laurent as the album cover art features an androgynous model." Long sentence, so a comma after the name 'Octavia St. Laurent' would help, in my opinion. Also, I do NOT know if this is possible, but it would be great if you could add a picture of the album cover in the page. Please do check copyright issues to make sure this is allowed, though.
Overall, seems a good start, although a bit short. Can we get a track listing? Any more relevent details about the background to add? If there's enough information, maybe you could make a seperate section for Reception? Can you list all the people involved in the album's production? Are there other ratings from professional reviewers you can add? (Perhaps looking at other Wiki pages on music albums would help?) Digitalhumanitiestudent1 (talk) 01:09, 8 November 2017 (UTC)
December 2017
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