User talk:Ashia2001/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Ashia2001 in topic draft response

Peer Review

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Overall your draft is well put together, I would just change a few things. You want to check your spelling as times you misspelled fern. Also the description sounds most as how they develop and not an specific description of the fern. For that section I would remove everything that describes how they grown and how tall they grow to its indivual section. Also there is some sentences for example, "In order to grow the southern lady farm has to be in part shade to full shade." does not really make try to possibly rewrite it to something that runs more smoothly. For instance you can say "In order for the southern lady fern to grow it has to be in a location where it gets either partial or full shade." Another thing is that since the article you chose does not have that much information already, you might want to add another section to your writing. Another section could be how a fern reproduces. You also wants to state in your description or introduction to which genus, kingdom, or phylum the lady fern is classified to be. Overall it will be a great addition to the article chosen. Jmarroquin12 (talk) 00:44, 16 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

Draft Feedback

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Ashia, you have made a good start to your article addition here. Your writing is mostly clear, although as your other reviewer said, do check your grammar again as you work on your final draft. And, you have gotten a good start on searching for information about this species. As you do more research on this species, you do need to be looking at journal articles as well. It looks like you have one journal article that you included, but do list the full citation in your article, with article title, journal name, author, etc. Also, your Dave's Garden reference is not as reliable as you want your references to be - your other 2 online references look alright.

Another suggestion I would give you to to look back at suggested subheading topics in the Wikipedia species handout that is posted on Bb. Do work to use this as a general guideline for your article, and as you do so I would suggest adding a Table of Contents to the top of this species article. I am also curious about your stated distribution for this species, as you make it sound like it is only found in Illinois. What is its full distribution? Rhirshorn (talk) 19:48, 21 November 2016 (UTC)Reply

draft response

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Thank you both for your feedback. I realize I have to go back as I had some grammar mistakes. I do plan on adding the phylum, genus and such into the description, and also I have to do a bit more research as there is not too much information on this. I plan on looking at more reliable sources and journals to get some more information. I will go back and try to put in better sub headings to fit well with the information. Again, thank you all for the feed back.Ashia2001 (talk) 03:43, 30 November 2016 (UTC)Reply