User talk:Atietz2020/Deliverance ministry

I did a few preliminary things to the actual article before we talked about it after class and you mentioned that we should do everything in the sandbox to make it easier to grade.

-The introduction was totally unreadable, so I rewrote it. I kept their basic sentence order/ideas to maintain the integrity of the original author and their thoughts, but rephrased things to improve it.
-I added the second two little paragraphs to the "sources of demonic presences" section, which I then expanded in my sandbox instead of in the actual page, after our conversation.
-I changed the title of a section from "differences from exorcism" to "deliverance vs. exorcism," because some people use the terms interchangeably and I want to expand on that information
-I changed the title of the section "Popularity" to "Prominent figures," because the title of the section didn't make sense to me and it was just talking about... prominent figures...
-I added the second paragraph (about Bob Larson) to the "Prominent figures" section
-I deleted a couple of obviously biased sentences (one uncited sentence that said that deliverance ministry stops people's spiritual growth, or something like that, and another similar sentence, although I can't remember exactly what it said).

Atietz2020 (talk) 22:35, 15 April 2020 (UTC)

Just realized I was supposed to post a link to my peer review on your talk page! https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Atietz2020/Deliverance_ministry/Charlie%20Phogg_Peer_Review?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review Charlie Phogg (talk) 15:58, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Charlie Phogg