User talk:Bagelbites3/sandbox

Peer Review 2=

"She was a big major" is weird wording for the start of this piece. I like that the article is shortened and comprehensive. Loved the use of hyperlinked terms. Too much use of passive voice for Taxol section. Ex: " Susan happily complied to the offer and received 10 milligrams of the drug from the NCI. She planned to examine the drug with her graduate student, Peter Schiff, for a month. After the month was up, they planned to decide whether or not the project displayed enough promise to continue. By the end of the month, they were heavily invested in the drug due to its outstanding uniqueness" This seems too non-descript and vague. This paragraph has some unnecessary fluff: "This revolutionary discovery initiated the search for similar molecule." All in all, clean out/specify some sentences to make it work. Good job!

RedMarket19 (talk) 19:06, 15 April 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review Take 2

The article looks great! Your links to other WP pages are useful and seem to cover what I would want linked out, the information is concise without some of the less important information you had in the initial draft, and the language seems to be at a reasonable level throughout. Just remember to go back and edit your citations so that they only show once each in your references, and for a reminder the trick for that is <ref to open the citation box and then click "Re-Use" instead of inserting a citation. Let me know if you'd like me to reread anything before you move it over into live! Doriineia (talk) 00:22, 5 April 2016 (UTC)