User talk:Bbrantley2/sandbox

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Destinyw94 in topic Tone

The edits proposed for this article are very strong. It would be helpful to incorporate additional sources, as mentioned, into sections which could benefit from further and more detailed explanation. The articles suggested to pull additional information from are strong in content and can greatly improve the quality of the existing Wikipedia page on the subject.Awilson107 (talk) 23:25, 2 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

This was a well-written article with many additional sources that were added to it. Especially, I like the section about the economy where it is said that polygyny is one of the negative factors that affect the polygynous society. However, I found it ironic because most men get many wives with the intention to increase their productivity, especially in the rural areas. Hence, usually, polygyny is practiced in the agricultural societies where the women and children represent the means of productions for their family. Besides, having many wives and many children is a sign of respect and honor for men in some African societies. Therefore, polygyny is not only practiced in rural areas but also in the urban areas.Efreitas2 (talk) 21:44, 5 March 2017 (UT

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All around great article! However, the first paragraph does not seem neutral to me. I feel that I know what position the author has on this topic. When I read it, I felt that the entire article would be dedicated to a comparison or double standards of polyandry instead of neutral facts on polygyny. I suggest editing or removing these two sentences in particular: Most countries that permit polygamy are Muslim-majority countries in which polygyny is the only form permitted. Polyandry is illegal in virtually every state of the world.

Jmilsap1 (talk) 02:11, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Peer review: Since your article is not limited to Africa, I found it helpful that your research is focused on certain areas such as economic impact. Adding the historical view and changes overtime could make the section stronger. It would also be useful if you could add other African countries and/or tribes and how polygyny is practiced among them. Fam02 (talk) 02:14, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Reply


I think after incorporating the proposed edits, the article will be solid. It would be interesting to see how polygamous relationships affect the children as well and this idea of a blended family. Lastly, I think that if you all are going to mention that religion is what influences polygamous relationships, you might want to add more background on the religion itself.


Ciaracorbett36 (talk) 04:08, 6 March 2017 (UTC) I think this draft is off to a great start. There are many citations that are easily referenced. There is a lot of information and overall a good amount of work for a draft.Reply

This article appears to be at a great start. There was plenty of information provided, however providing information on multiple countries in Africa regarding your topic will strengthen your article significantly. Destinyw94 (talk) 12:20, 6 March 2017 (UTC)Destinyw94Reply