Bermondsey Boys

Believe.in

I understand why you're confused. But when you think about it, the fact that you're not doing something for commercial gain doesn't mean you aren't promoting or advertising.

Okay, here's a start. You wrote: "Believe.in is a UK-based social platform designed to connect charities and fundraisers to empower both to do more good with 100 per cent of all donations and 100 per cent of all Gift Aid going to the intended charity."

Had you written "Believe.in is a UK-based social platform designed to connect charities and fundraisers "to empower both to do more good" [followed by reference to the document where Believe.in states this]. Believe.in claims that 100 per cent of all donations and 100 per cent of all Gift Aid goes to the intended charity", it would have been much harder to say that the article was promotional. (There are similar examples throughout.)

I would recommend you read Wikipedia:NPOV tutorial for further advice. Other people have found it helpful. In the meantime, I will transfer the text of the page to your sandbox, where you can work on it.Deb (talk) 16:44, 28 May 2013 (UTC)

Certainly better, although I'm not sure I like the "Business Model" paragraph, which seems to be saying "this product is better than Justgiving or Virgin, whereas I wouldn't have named the competitors. If you'd like further help, you could try Wikipedia:Articles for creation, although there seems to be a bit of a backlog.Deb (talk) 11:57, 30 May 2013 (UTC)

Hello again - I've gone back and made some changes as suggested. Thanks for the feedback and here's hoping that I've satisfied the criteria. Bermondsey Boys (talk) 12:46, 5 June 2013 (UTC)

Possibly unfree files

Some of your files may be unfree. See Wikipedia:Possibly unfree files/2013 November 1#OTRS pending since June. --Stefan2 (talk) 21:14, 1 November 2013 (UTC)