User talk:Bluerfn/Ivalice

Ivalice

Well, looks like a decent template to be getting on with. The Overview section is probably superfluous (the lead-in paragraphs serve its purpose well enough), and the Design heading should focus mostly on out of universe stuff like Matsuno's role, inspirations, and, perhaps, the evolution of Ivalice throughout the games. Again, I'm looking at the Spira article, here. --Made2Fade 11:53, 15 March 2007 (UTC)

Ah, nice additions. And referenced, too! It's coming along well. I have more additional info, unfortunately, I've exams to face, probably taking a wikibreak, so I'll pop up on rare occasions. Bluerです。 ^なにか? 01:32, 19 March 2007 (UTC)

No problem, I'll do what I can in the meantime. Could I trouble you to source the rebe and helgas, if you have a reference for them? I know of no mention of them in the game, and your edit seems to indicate you have an official source. --Made2Fade 00:05, 22 March 2007 (UTC)

Ha, it's done. I'll be back to really do the edits much much later. Bluerです。 ^なにか? 07:49, 23 March 2007 (UTC)

Vagrant Story

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• Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.^[?]
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, APR _t 23:57, 17 May 2007 (UTC)

WP:FF Remake

Should we keep the "hall of fame section"? I'm putting it in, but I'm on the fence. --PresN 14:13, 17 September 2007 (UTC)