Bluestarsjay
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Hi Jason,
Your article is very interesting and thorough. I'm assuming that you're expanding the already existing Omphalion page? When reading the article I had some thoughts on some of the points you made:
1. The part about how the Byzantines thought marble was frozen water. In the preceding sentence, maybe link the word marble to the main Wikipedia article on marble. When I read that part, I started thinking that I don't really know what marble is or how it's formed etc.
2. Is there a Wikipedia article for Antony of Novgorod? That may be a good link as well. I would say err on the side of too many links to other articles. When I read Wikipedia articles I'm always clicking on the links. Don't underestimate what people don't know, like the marble thing.
3. One of the most interesting sections is the part about spolia! Another strong part is that you make it very clear that there are different opinions about the function of the Omphalion.
4. Overall, I think you could keep adding more details because all the information is relevant and then break it up into sections. Maybe a history heading, and maybe the "jewel style" could be a heading. Is there a different word for that? Maybe Design could be the heading?
5. Are you able to find any public domain images of the Omphalion?
Jrmastor (talk) 21:46, 26 November 2017 (UTC)jrmastor
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