User talk:Brandonhoilett/sandbox

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Artyshark

Summary: Collider.com delivers film news through podcasts and videos. The group has recurring series featuring celebrities and film execs.

Major notes: Unsure if the "videos" table is supposed to be longer, but it should include both the three series you go into more detail about snd the channels in the introductory section, even if you don't go into more detail about them all (although you should think about it).

I would also take the second and third sentences of your introductory sentence and put them somewhere else you see fitting - I think a little more information about the site's content (like in the fourth and fifth sentence) would give good context before you introduce more in-depth information about the site.

"Collider.com...has been dedicated to delivering content that is analytical and informative." Unsure if this is a neutral point-of-view/something that can be proven...maybe think about rewording. Same under "Reception" with: "The Collider News Podcast is received well by viewers..." - don't say if they're doing good or bad by your standards, just give the facts.

Minor notes: Good use of a photo. Think about putting one on the right at the top where your box that says genre, founder, etc. is.

Check your spelling throughout - I noticed one error.

Artyshark (talk) 23:52, 11 November 2018 (UTC)Reply