User talk:Brendaturcios/sandbox

On WikiDashboard, you assigned yourself "Electric Dance Music" instead of "Electronic Dance Music," which is the article on which you are working. The amount of content written here is superb. Lots of research has gone into this Sandbox page, and that's always a good thing to see! Sentences are filled with detail, which is always what you want to see from an informative article. The structure of this article could definitely be changed around. Even in your Sandbox, maybe you can put it in the order that it'll be written into the article and specify where the additional info will be added. Another suggestion would be removing one sentence in the final paragraph within your sandbox: Similarly, "electronic dance music" can mean different things to different people. This sentence seems to just be there for filler space, and even the sentence following it before the parenthesis seems unnecessary. You can define a term but it's unnecessary to say that a term is vague; instead simply provide the definition, which was done well! I suggest to take out the two sentences before. "(Club music is defined by what is popular....attributes.)" In talking about structuring your article, I realized myself that my own article was not structured well in my own Sandbox, and I should organize my copy in my Sandbox to reflect how it will be written into my article to edit it. I also realized that I should link more keywords within my article to existing Wiki pages as you have done. Thank you for reminding me to do these two things! Great job for this assignment! You taught me things to edit myself, and I thank you for that. Kcataudella (talk) 01:53, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey Kimberly thank you for taking the time to review my article. You're right I did put the wrong one by accident. Thank you for catching that I was able to change it. Yeah you're right, I should change it in the order in which it would be seen in the article so I don't confuse myself or misplace something. I see why you may have thought that the sentence was redundant or unnecessary but I thought that adding it allowed for people to know that this genre can mean and be used differently by people. Thank you for reminding me about structure that's something that I am going to look back at. Brendaturcios (talk) 02:52, 19 October 2016 (UTC)