User talk:Cassandrale/Brittney Ogike

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Chuckwagon23050 in topic Looking good

Hey! I'm not sure this is where I'm supposed to write my peer review, but here we are. I really liked how this article covered many points and focused on multiple aspects of Ogike's life. My only suggestion would be to work on organizing those thoughts into a more coherent order, with more elaboration on each topic. Good job so far though.

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Hey guys! I really liked your article. Very fluent. I don't think there is much you need to improve on, good work! Amber Thank you for the thoughts I appreciate it. Chuckwagon23050 (talk) 16:31, 8 December 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Hey guys I am getting some work in to make sure we get this done. I looked at the peer review and agreed that our paragraph went all over the place and had spelling errors. I tried to fix grammar and spelling the best I could but I am not perfect so if you see anything feel free to call me out. I also changed the order of our events so they flow into each other instead of jumping back and forth from thing to thing. There is still plenty of work to do so if anyone wants to help they can add citations to the sentences which talk about info found in the three sources. It would also be great to find some personal info like birth date or really anything because we don't have much. Thanks guys Chuckwagon23050 (talk) 16:42, 8 December 2021 (UTC)Reply