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Latest comment: 6 years ago by Kboback in topic Kyla's Feedback

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Seems to be a very thorough summary on Donald Ross. Aside from the dead link (Memphis Country Club), there are only grammatical errors. An example of this is in paragraph 2. After you say "Although Donald Ross was a competitive golfer", you should insert a comma after golfer. I also think that the sentence "He displayed great attention to detail" in paragraph 3 could be left it and it would flow better. --MSan123 (talk) 19:15, 22 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Kyla's Feedback

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This is very in depth about his life; nicely done! Aside from a few grammatical errors, nice job. You have a lot of great references. Kboback (talk) 20:26, 23 October 2018 (UTC)Reply