User talk:Ddzhangiryan/sandbox

I think that your draft of the wikipedia article is currently in the form of an outline. At this point it does not look nor feel 'encyclopedic. I think that you can do three things to make your article seem more like an encyclopedia article. First, I think that you can adjust the formatting and use the consistant headersthat Wikipedia uses on their site. Second, I think that you should explain each of your points a little more to add context and clarification. For example, you say, "after the occurrence of the 2016 Orlando nightclub shooting, Trump used Twitter to renew his call for a Muslim immigration ban." Here, I am not sure what the connection is between the Orlando nightclub shooting adn the Muslim immigration ban. Third, I think that you should not shy away from making your article have a little more detail. For example, when you say "#TravelBan: Social media hashtag to the same instance after Trump announced the immigration ban on Twitter." I wish that you had defined the Travel Ban, or at least mention which countries it affected. Overall, however, I think that you did a great job! Daniella Wenger (talk) 23:20, 19 October 2017 (UTC)