- I like the content and the lay out of your wiki page. The introduction is captivating and you use the links for words that are uncertain to the reader.
- The sections are brief and a lot of bullet points. Looks like the plan for a final project, oooh. But your bullet points can lead to some good content.
- Not enough sources, only 5.
- If possible, add some color to the page by adding images.
Martii70 (talk) 02:10, 12 November 2020 (UTC)
- I think the way you laid out your Wiki was super easy to read and I really liked what you included for the research direction.
- In the Prevention/Treatment section, I feel that the every day reader might be confused as to the medication classes, so finding a way to condense/explain that could be helpful!
- Adding some Wiki Images could help add some character to the page and explain a major part of the disease (glomeruli) in relation to where they are found in the kidneys.
- I love your epidemiology facts, they are super interesting! Potentially adding sub-headings or bullets to this might make the data easier to comprehend.
Jenlorenzana (talk) 19:45, 16 November 2020 (UTC)
- Your layout was very clear and easy to follow-- this was a huge bonus because it looked very aesthetically pleasing and inviting for the reader.
- I think you could have a few more sources. A variety is good and then you additionally might find some inconsistencies in the information that you have previously come across.
- Additionally, I think it would be good to add some images so the reader doesn't have to look at a page of just words!! :)
- The bullet points are good because it provides quick, easy information. However, I think it might be too simple for this project.
Hmartin55 (talk) 18:31, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
- Symptoms needs citations
- Some grammar issues. Check over your wording.* Link any term that is important or uncommon to its own wikipedia article the first time it shows up.
- Research directions needs citations.
- Doing a quick google scholar search finds several recent articles. Make sure to address those
- Well structured and with lots of good information!
- Consider including a picture to demonstrate relevant anatomy