User talk:Dgomez14ru/sandbox

Dr. Weiner

• Unless there is something actively wrong with them, do NOT change the words that were already on the page. Just add new material. You also lost some good links in doing this! The existing "Reasons" section was actually a good causes section! Just use it!
• Link HEAVILY to other wikipedia pages. The first time you use a term, it should be linked. You have some, but you need a lot more.
• Use simple terminology whenever possible. This is not written in a lay accessible manner. Some of it feels complicated for the sake of complication. Simple is better!
• Needs some editing for clarity and accuracy. I encourage you to consider working with the writing center.
• Good use of existing pictures
• Link words within wikipedia, not outside. Asymptomatic is an outside link, when the wikipedia page is fine.
• Some of your citations have formatting issues. Go check them!
• You cited the same source twice, but created a new citation each time. When you recite a source, use the feature within the citation manager so it doesn't create a new copy.
• You have a lot of good information here! Once you have it properly organized, you will be well on your way.
• Abstract should not have a header. It's just the part at the top.
• You have two good sources for recent research, but I'd like to see more. There are plenty of sources.

Sweiner02 (talk) 02:03, 16 November 2024 (UTC)

Ewa Kiluk

• You have great photos! The wiki page looks very well organized.
• In the research direction you mention transillumination, oct, and AI as possible further treatments. If possible maybe expand on that. How are they going to use these advancements?
• It may be beneficial to link more words in the wiki page, especially in the abstract.
• Under treatments you mention older people are recommended to only get a crown restoration, if possible expand on this. Why?

Ewaki (talk) 00:55, 18 November 2024 (UTC)

Erika Meraz

• The second sentence in your abstract needs to be checked again, there seems to be a run on sentence. I'll quote it for reference: "They are sometimes referred to as a non-cavitated enamel fracture, is a microfracture or superficial break in a tooth's enamel layer that does not penetrate into the dentin underneath."
• The following words in your abstract could be linked: enamel layer, dentin, bruxism, transillumination, iatrogenic,
• I noticed that you linked dentin in your section on signs and symptoms, maybe link it in your abstract since its used there first.
• In your epidemiology section you mention studies that show males are more likely to experience trauma. You should find the study and site it.
• In your epidemiology section you linked bruxism, you should link it in your abstract since it was used there first.
• Overall I think you have all of your information! its now about fixing the tiny details which is a great step to be on!
• Im also really impressed by your sandbox! Its looking like a true wikipedia page :)

Erikameraz764 (talk) 18:34, 18 November 2024 (UTC)