TA Comments:
In-text citations: none
Professional tone: yes
Paraphrasing real science: yes
Grammar and spelling: minor grammar issues remain, such as unnecessary words and improper phrasing
Links to other wiki articles: none
Score: 13/20
Peer Review:
1. The sentence “The first approximation is the Born-Oppenheimer Approximation” should not be bolded. If anything, an appropriate sub header should be included above it. e.g. The Born-Oppenheimer Approximation
2. Is it possible for you to include a solution to the Schrodinger Equation using the Born-Oppenheimer Approximation to say, a Hydrogen atom?
3. Could you explain the curve on the Born-Oppenheimer Approximation section a little bit more? For example, what is the repulsive curve and the bound curve, and why and how do they differ etc. Is there also an attractive curve since there is a repulsive curve?
4. Again, the sentence “The second approximation is the orbital approximation” should not be bolded. Include a sub header above it naming “The Orbital Approximation”
5. There are no citations. I think the image and equation need to be cited.
6. There are also no links on appropriate words or phrases e.g. Hamiltonian, Huckle Theory, tight binding approximation, variational principle
7. The equation of the Dirac notation at the bottom of the page can be further explained, especially now that it’s been covered in class.
Overall: The page is pretty clear and easy to understand. Maybe it would be difficult to do, but it would be a lot nicer to have a little more information and explanation on the things shown, such as the graph and the equation.
-posted by Wei Li
Li, Wei Peer Review Score: 20/20
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