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Howdy, I was cleaning up some of the technical wiki parts of Teresa Bright and noticed that there were some problems with the references. One problem was just technical, and I can fix it for once the bigger problem is fixed. The bigger problem is that most of the text that you referenced back to the website was taken verbatim, and too much of it was taken to count as a review of the website (and that was probably not your purpose anyways).
Please keep working on the article, and rewrite the sections taken from the website in your own words. If there are still big chunks there in a few days, they will probably be deleted. Feel free to respond here if you have any questions, and feel free to concentrate on the content of the article, as others can come by and fiddle with {{templates inclusion}} [[wiki linking]] and <ref>end notes</ref>. JackSchmidt (talk) 19:52, 25 January 2008 (UTC)
- (replied to your post)
- Sure. I think it may still be too close to the source, but it has been a week and all the other articles nominated at that time have been deleted, so I'll take down the banner for now. Probably your best bet is to find a second source. I myself tried to reword the article, but honestly most of it is straightforward facts. If one had a second source it would be easy to be more creative in presentation. JackSchmidt (talk) 00:06, 31 January 2008 (UTC)
- I made a few changes, but it still needs expansion. I think the Honolulu Advertiser article you found should be a great source. JackSchmidt (talk) 04:15, 31 January 2008 (UTC)