User talk:Emaria2222/sandbox
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Gardneca in topic Feedback
Emaria2222 all great article selections, feel free to choose whichever interests you the most! Gardneca (talk) 08:54, 12 March 2019 (UTC)
- Emaria2222 nice choice of topic, and good job so far on drafting the article. Keep up the excellent work! Gardneca (talk) 02:56, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
- I enjoyed the additions to the final battle, strong imagery. Although I feel like you could add more to the other sections phrasing wise. Specifically in the lifting of the cat I think that it could be rephrased for better visuals and understanding. Do not be afraid to add some more of your own words! (ThePinkBran)
- Also in your final section Ragnarok you say "one signal for the coming of Ragnarok" I think "sign for the coming of Ragnarok" flows smoother
- Another place I feel needs rephrasing is in the section Thor's fishing trip "Another encounter occurs when Thor goes" I would instead say "Jormungander and Thor meet again when Thor goes" comment added by ThePinkBran (talk • contribs) 21:42, 17 April 2019 (UTC)
- I enjoyed the additions to the final battle, strong imagery. Although I feel like you could add more to the other sections phrasing wise. Specifically in the lifting of the cat I think that it could be rephrased for better visuals and understanding. Do not be afraid to add some more of your own words! (ThePinkBran)
Feedback
editThePinkBran thanks for your feedback on this article. Remember to always be logged in and to sign your name after all comments! Emaria2222 there are some good places to start here, but your big task in the next week or so will be to add more content to this article, since you've only added a few sentences here and there. If you need help finding additional sources beyond our textbook, please let me know, since I'd really like to see you improve the existing Wikipedia page by expanding it and making it more comprehensive and reliable. Gardneca (talk) 00:53, 22 April 2019 (UTC)