ExSilvissima
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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:16, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
Hi ExSilvissima! I just finished reviewing your edits in your paideia sandbox. Here are the comments I made. I hope you find them helpful. Feel free to ask any questions.
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Nice re-ordering of sentences in Lead. Easier to follow and flows better.
Citation could be made in reference to Homer in 1st and 2nd paragraphs of "the idea of paideia." (I like the addition of "in ancient and modern cultures" to the title of the section. Relevant.)
I like that you have information on how there is paideia mentality for literature. Good connection.
Could expand on Aristotle's paideia proposal to flesh out that paragraph.
Good, clear re-wording of Isocrates paragraph.
Good that you made workable links, whereas the original article doesn't let you click on them to see the sources.
Neutral tone and balance throughout.
Overall, great re-wording and additions to the article. More information could be added to some smaller paragraphs like last two paragraphs in "the idea of paideia..." section. Greekazoid (talk) 23:13, 18 November 2021 (UTC)Greekazoid