User talk:Francisle1992/sandbox

TA Comments:

In-text citations: none

Professional tone: yes

Paraphrasing real science: yes

Grammar and spelling: minor grammar issues such as misplaced commas (Gilbert Newton Lewis, and Niels Bohr were among…”

Links to other wiki articles: none

Score: 13/20

Peer Review:

Overall, your article's structure is good. I like the way you organized your discussion by introducing noteworthy scientists and devoting a paragraph to each. It has a nice, logical flow in terms of showing the progression of discoveries in the field of quantum mechanics. I would recommend providing a little more detail about the experiments of Bohr and Lewis to set the stage more clearly for the rest of your article. Also, all of the scientists you mention in your article except for Torsten Herrlinger have their own Wikipedia pages, so when you mention them in your article you should insert links to their pages. You can do this by highlighting the name or word you want to link, then clicking on the link button (which looks like two little chain links) and selecting the Wikipedia page you want to link to. Lastly, there are a few small grammar issues throughout so you might consider having someone you trust proofread it for you. Otherwise, good rough draft. Hope that helps! --Eoneill8 (talk) 06:10, 22 November 2016 (UTC)

O'NEILL, ELIZABETH LANAEE Peer Review Score: 20/20