User talk:Genome replication/sandbox

Maria Rizwan

- I love the details you have regarding your topic. There's a lot of research done

- However make sure to add in other Wikipedia citations as it is a requirement in the rubric.

- It will also help elevate your page by adding some more separations. The paragraphs seem a bit run on

- And add a reference part at the end too Mariarizwan100 (talk) 17:32, 13 November 2024 (UTC)

Dr. Weiner

• Start with what was already on the page! You were required to copy that in. Don’t replace it, add to it. It also gives you a starting place for citations!
• Missing abstract. Signs and symptoms seems to be actually a mix of abstract and this section.
• Make sure the language is approachable. Some of this uses unnecessary jargon or is excessively complicated.
• There are some relevant images in wikimedia commons that would help with anatomy, symptoms, and/or mechanism. I encourage you to make use of them.
• Divide up material into reasonable length paragraphs. Consider subheadings for some sections.
• Link HEAVILY to other wikipedia pages. The first time you use a term, it should be linked.
• Every piece of information needs a citation. If you took all the info in a paragraph from one place you can just cite at the end of the paragraph, but no paragraph should be uncited and there should not be a sentence after the last citation.
• Some of diagnosis reads more like patient advice. This is a report, not aimed at patients.
• "There are currently no specific CDC recommendations regarding cyanopsia, as it is not a contagious condition nor a public health concern." Then don't put this in!
• "Studies continue to explore how certain medications influence visual perception and why some individuals may experience blue vision while others do not." says nothing
• Keep your material clear and succinct. Don't include words or sentences that don't add to the meaning. I listed a few above, but there are a LOT.
• Missing research directions
• You have a lot of good information here! Once you have it properly organized, you will be well on your way.

Sweiner02 (talk) 18:25, 17 November 2024 (UTC)

Giovanny Sanchez

- I really like that you went super in depth with all of your sections.

- I would add an abstract at the beginning to summarize all of the information that you present later on

- Don't forget to link to other wikipedia pages

- I would add a section at the end to include everything you cited as well as any journals or articles you used for research Giovannys0914 (talk) 22:49, 18 November 2024 (UTC)