User talk:Gomez.alexa/sandbox

Review of Unit 2 Draft

I think your idea of transforming the accomplishments section into a chronological list would be very helpful for the article. Reading through the list as is was a little overwhelming since it seems to only be getting longer as SportVU develops.

I suggest you could organize the accomplishments (underneath each time span) to discuss specific sports as separate paragraphs/bullets. I believe the more specificity you can give to this section then the easier it will be to read. Lastly, if you could expand on the accomplishments list itself to include some (if any exist) accomplishments beyond 2013 then that would be even better.

- Adel A.

Unit 2 Review

What does the article (or section) do well?

-You've got a good outline going and your idea for how you'll change the formatting is solid.

What changes would you suggest overall?

-I thin kyou could use an intro that explains what SportsVU is because I have no idea.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

-You suggested way of merging history and key accomplishments and working on some kind of intro would be great.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!

-I can't see anything that's applicable to my article, but I'll make sure to check back when there's more just to get informed!

Tykam993 (talk) 04:27, 23 March 2017 (UTC)