User talk:Graceyi11/Housing at the University of Washington
Hi, I'm starting to walk through articles and give everyone informal early feedback on how they're doing. You'll notice this is a little bit form-letter-ish but I hope it is still helpful!
I see you've made some changes and are starting to incorporate elements from our training, but there's still a ways to go with this article. If you're feeling stuck, please let me know how I can support you.
I particularly appreciate your usage of good quality sources in this revision!
One area of improvement for this article will be to shift towards a more encyclopedic tone -- some of the word choices sound a little more like advertising than an encyclopedia article.
Article status
editHi @Graceyi11:
This is good progress. You should compare your article to a similar article, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Housing_at_the_University_of_Chicago
One difference you will notice is that your UW Housing article has a lot of details about housing costs. I think what you'll find is that specifics of costs are not generally considered encyclopedic details. These types of details often become rapidly out of date and don't have a lot of purpose once they change. The only exceptions I've seen for this are when the specifics of the costs is particularly important to describing the subject (like a situation where the price of something went from 50 cents to 50 dollars over night, etc.). Unfortunately this does mean a pretty tough edit is needed, but once you've done that, I think the article will be in pretty good shape. Let me know when you'd like me to make another pass
Go live approval
editHi @Graceyi11:
You are approved to go live with this article. I made a few more tweaks to pull a few housing costs out that escaped your edit and some extra spaces.
As a reminder, here are our go-live steps:
- Final read-through draft.
- Check live article for changes. [History Tab]
- Two browsers side by side, if you can. Source editing mode ("Code mode"), not visual editor.
- Paragraph by paragraph copy, leaving behind an explanatory edit summary after each chunk of changes.
- Leave a note on article talk page to say you created the page and are open to feedback.
- Leave a note at the top of your sandbox version to say you are done making edits to the sandbox version.
- Submit a link to your article on Canvas.
Celebrate!