GreenMacaw
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editHello, GreenMacaw, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.
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Peer Review Response
editHi wanted to also post my resposne to your message here to make sure you saw it. That sounds reasonable to me. if you edit jcools4 I can edit yours and that of thepolarbear and we should be covered. No worries on the article, I probably won't have time to edit until Wednesday, though mine will be done by the end of the week. As a general note, my editing has involved a great deal of adding citations, more so than content, so take that into consideration when reviewing. Thank you. Remember glia (talk) 18:39, 11 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer review Notes
editHere are my notes on your article, hope you find some of them useful! This is a great expansion of the original stub article. Are there available pictures of Denvir available so you could put one as reference? This is not of course necessary but it would be nice and I’d imagine they are in public domain at this point. The intro makes a significant point of his role as a moderate during a time of sectarian tension, while this is described later is isn’t flagged in any way and anyone who wanted to jump straight to his role in that might want a better way to notice it. As for the scientific engagement toward the end of the article, there is good description of his roles and affiliations but there is not much description of what he specifically studied or taught, which would benefit the article if the information is available. These are relatively minor notes, on the whole this is a lot of good added content. Remember glia (talk) 19:00, 14 April 2017 (UTC)
Peer Review
editHello! Here are my edits for your article:
First of all, I think your introduction sentence is quite efficient. At first I was thrown off by "The Most Reverend", but that is only due to the fact that I have never heard it before. With that said, I think it would be nice if your introduction sentence didn't stand alone. That is, if there is more information you can dig up to include in the introduction, and then use that to structure the rest of your essay, I think that would be beneficial.
Saying he was educated as a "young boy" sounds a bit unnecessary. Perhaps you could just say his childhood education included...
The term P.P. should be used in full as "parish priest" before it is abbreviated.
Lastly, is there no other resources where information on him can be found? This article is a really good start, and could improve from more information and structure. Currently the article consists of one section, which may or may not be enough info to meet wikipedia's standards.
Overall, very interesting topic and great start. I hope my feedback was useful. Please let me know if you have any questions.
Best,
Categories and user talk pages
editHi GreenMacaw - You have inadvertently added your User:GreenMacaw/sandbox page to the following categories Category:Irish mathematicians, Category:Alumni of St Patrick's College, Maynooth, and several others. This can be avoided by using the Colon trick. In fact, you can see an example of the colon trick in this very paragraph. Welcome to Wikipedia. It is good practice for science writing and a lot of fun.--Toploftical (talk) 15:05, 3 July 2017 (UTC)