User talk:Gwen.majorwilliams/sandbox
I think the topic is definitely interesting and you have much that you are able to expand upon! I would suggest adding more headings to make the transitions/topics a bit clearer. I would also suggest adding more links within your paragraphs as references to different acts or legal cases, if applicable. It also might be useful to bring in other feminist perspectives regarding sexual discrimination/prostitution to support different claims. From that, you could also expand the ERA section to explain how/why it would benefit women or victims of discrimination. Expanding on the lack of rehabilitation might also be interesting or adding a section on statistics?
Grammar: likelihood is one word
Jennifer.norris (talk) 03:07, 9 November 2016 (UTC)
Hey Gwen, I made edits to your writing earlier, however Professor Bayer could not need them because I did them incorrectly, so I'm just going to do them again. Essentially, what I did was copy and past your original work here, and then I just bolded, which are in quotation marks my edits. Please let me know if you have any questions.
Sexual Discrimination is an issue that is present in both sex work and forced prostitution which is considered to be a "form of" violence against women. Historically, crimes involving violence against women have been taken less seriously by the law. Although acts such as the Violence Against Women Act have been passed to take steps toward preventing such violence, there is still sexism rooted in the way that the legal system approaches these cases. Gender Biased violence is a serious form of discrimination that has slipped through many cracks in the legal system of the United States[1]. These efforts have fallen short due to the fact that there is no constitutional protection for women against discrimination.
There is often no evidence, according to police, that when men are arrested for soliciting a prostitute that it is a gender biased crime. However, there are large discrepancies between the arrests of prostitutes and the arrests of men caught in the act. While 70% of prostitution related arrests are of woman prostitutes, only 10% of related arrests are customers. [2] Regardless if the girl or woman is either underage or forced into the exchange, she is still often arrested and victim blamed instead of being offered resources. The men who are charged with engaging in these illegal acts with prostitutes are able to pay for the exchange and therefore are usually able to pay for their release while the woman may not be able to. This generates a cycle of violence against women, as the situation’s outcome favors the man. In one case, a nineteen year-old woman in Oklahoma was charged with offering to engage in prostitution when the woman was known to have previously been a victim of human sex trafficking.[3] She is an example of how the criminalization or prostitution often leads to women being arrested multiple times due to the fact that they are often punished or arrested even when the victim of a situation. Young women and girls have a much higher "likelihood" of getting arrested for prostitution than boys in general, and woman victims of human trafficking often end up being arrested upon multiple occasions, being registered as a sex offender, and being institutionalized.[4] The lack of rehabilitation given to women after experiences with human sex trafficking contributes to the cycles of arrests that most woman who engage in prostitution face.
The ERA or Equal Rights Amendment is an amendment to the U.S Constitution that has not yet been ratified. It would guarantee that equal rights could not be denied under the law on account of sex. [5] With this amendment in place, it would allow for sex workers and victims of human sex trafficking to have legal leverage when it comes to the discrepancies in how men and women (customers and prostitutes) are prosecuted. It would also address these discrepancies as sexual discrimination.
Overall, I think that your topic is very good and well thought out. I think that if you added different feminist perspectives to your piece, it would help support the many claims that you make. Other than that, I just made a few grammatical corrections. Good luck!